tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2214911829909056122.post6506127194462183018..comments2011-02-04T11:30:14.977-08:00Comments on 7th grade science: Audrey Conrad 3David Buthhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/02284793524525845880noreply@blogger.comBlogger6125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2214911829909056122.post-52679071150387823162009-11-25T11:46:48.398-08:002009-11-25T11:46:48.398-08:00Audrey, your paper was really good. It was also ve...Audrey, your paper was really good. It was also very informative, very interesting and had a lot of detail on the Africanized Honey Bee. I think you could have added some similes and metaphors, made your introduction a little more captivating, and maybe added what scientists are trying to do to stop the bees. Over all your paper was very well organized and written. FROM: NKATHAAnonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14229068470238537069noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2214911829909056122.post-1969370061375301212009-11-25T07:41:29.072-08:002009-11-25T07:41:29.072-08:00Audrey,
Your paper is looking amazing so far. The...Audrey,<br />Your paper is looking amazing so far. The only I noticed was (and this may be because of the format of the blog) that you didn't italicize your scientific name, or tab the beginning to your paragraphs. Also, I found a couple grammar and spelling mistakes, but they don't occur often. I liked that you put in a lot of information; I thought that was great :) Also it sounded interesting and engaging, had some good word choice, and was very organized. Great job so far!<br /><br />~JuliaAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2214911829909056122.post-18991966838331212192009-11-24T11:31:55.307-08:002009-11-24T11:31:55.307-08:00I have heard about these killer bees,not good at a...I have heard about these killer bees,not good at all for us.good paperAnonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11685391626236043264noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2214911829909056122.post-52226617763697748612009-11-23T09:15:52.012-08:002009-11-23T09:15:52.012-08:00Audrey, I liked reading your paper. Looks good so ...Audrey, I liked reading your paper. Looks good so far! You need to remember to italisize your species scientific name, and maybe even include a phrase in your inroduction about the Africanized Honey Bee. I liked your conclusion, with the 'Killer Bee'Unknownhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15665277575788865297noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2214911829909056122.post-66404843155521733802009-11-23T09:10:39.028-08:002009-11-23T09:10:39.028-08:00amazing, you may want to pull people in a little m...amazing, you may want to pull people in a little more in the frist phaugrafe, and you may want to make it two pages,and 5 body phaigrafs and then it will be amazing. look though your paper again.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18394620618688975709noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2214911829909056122.post-44337389024957602762009-11-23T09:03:50.704-08:002009-11-23T09:03:50.704-08:00That was great!
it had very good word choice and i...That was great!<br />it had very good word choice and i am already feeling scared of the 'KILLER BEE'!<br />Also very informative.<br />there may have been a few spelling mistakes, but they are quick fix and infrequent.<br />It didn't look very long, but that was probably the format of the blog that did that.<br />Possibly include more on how to recognize it.Laurahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14063319715673278595noreply@blogger.com