tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2214911829909056122.post6199575445141633850..comments2011-02-04T11:30:14.977-08:00Comments on 7th grade science: Laura VanderhorstDavid Buthhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/02284793524525845880noreply@blogger.comBlogger6125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2214911829909056122.post-22381667972078859712009-11-25T17:38:50.755-08:002009-11-25T17:38:50.755-08:00Throughout the paper, i notice that it is purely a...Throughout the paper, i notice that it is purely amazing, and very factual. In your final draft, be shure to include the length of the catterpillar. overall: shocking, amazing, factual.<br />-zachAnonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04319740323349612378noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2214911829909056122.post-81526079647506748722009-11-25T17:02:21.926-08:002009-11-25T17:02:21.926-08:00sperate the paragarphs like the questionin the beg...sperate the paragarphs like the questionin the begaining, you need a little more info.good words but spell out U.S.A.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11685391626236043264noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2214911829909056122.post-89298679041111405772009-11-23T09:25:08.829-08:002009-11-23T09:25:08.829-08:00Great job, but you could've put a Tab on each ...Great job, but you could've put a Tab on each paragraph. And I also noticed that you kept repeating diffrent things about the pesticide. Ya should've put in how long the catipiller is.David Buthhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02284793524525845880noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2214911829909056122.post-58319089025143493272009-11-23T09:22:42.431-08:002009-11-23T09:22:42.431-08:00Amazing, amazing. Encore. Though a few things were...Amazing, amazing. Encore. Though a few things were botthering me. First off, the sentance in the intro: "Invasive species are usually introduced by humans accidentally or on purposely introduced but then proved unable to control." The middle is quite qunfusling. I think you ran two sentances together. And I said this to Andrew H. but you might not want to start papers with a question. You also repeated a lot of information a lot of times. other than that, very well written. Ciao.<br />--Epitome of Amazingness (Tristan Fuller)Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2214911829909056122.post-9156147883305003322009-11-23T09:04:38.528-08:002009-11-23T09:04:38.528-08:00really cool, very interesting.you might want to ma...really cool, very interesting.you might want to make the interducshen a little longer,and more pulling you in like. also it may just be me,but i think you shouldn't just put u.s.a,because you don't know how is going ot read it soyou want it really clear.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18394620618688975709noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2214911829909056122.post-7393583787151941842009-11-23T09:04:04.379-08:002009-11-23T09:04:04.379-08:00Intresting. might want to double check on spelling...Intresting. might want to double check on spelling! pestisides are bad, i hope they use biodegradable products,too!Lindseyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15954510262640091977noreply@blogger.com